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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Hello :)

I have already come to adore this story! Luna is such a different and unique character. Its really difficult to find stories that seem to characterize her and her thoughts so well, but you have done a phenomenal job. I really feel like you catch that almost mythical edge to Lunas character. She goes based on what she feels is right, based on what she knows around her and isnt fazed when other people get in the way of that. She just keeps on going. It really is amazing.

I also love your descriptions! All of it usually adds to the characterization, but you also use a fair bit of imagery. And it all beautifully weaves into the story, keeping the flow going. Even when you add in some dialogue at the end of the chapter, it keeps with the flow. It doesnt seem abrupt in the least bit.

Im actually going to share two of my favourite lines of description and then I have one or two other things to say :)

First line: She shut her eyes and felt herself slip away from conscious thought. She was no longer falling, but floating. I dont know what it is about this one, but I adore it. I like the entire part before it about the falling, and I like how it changed over to floating. It was just so nicely word.

Second line: They were strikingly blue, a kind and reassuring hue. I liked this line because, first of all, it kind of rhymed. And it really put Lunas voice into it. It made me smile and it justit flowed in so nicely, it was great!

The last thing I wanted to mention was Rolf. I really enjoy reading his character because he seems just as dreamy as Luna, yet he has a different edge to him. Im not quite sure what that edge is yet, but it makes him different than Luna. Im excited to read more to see if I can figure out what that edge is. I also want to read more because I want to see what will happen between Rolf and Luna. They have such unique personalities.

Great job! Ill hopefully be back to read more soon :D

~Grimmerz

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review!

I'm glad you appreciate my characterization of Luna. I am trying really hard to bring a depth to her rather than just portraying her as a odd characiture. Rolf is dreamy in my opinion and really compliments Luna.

Hope you continue to read along. I'd love to hear what you think of later chapters.


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