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Review:Tonks1247 says:
Oh my goodness. This was so dark, so crushing, yet it fit the moment perfectly. It expressed Snape’s honest emotion, his regret, his love…it expressed it all in a very eloquent way. I really feel as though I got a good grasp of what he was and the change he went through upon finding Lily dead…about finding the mistake he made by turning to the darks arts and other Death Eaters. His realization is painful and I can feel it just as strong as he feels it from the choice of words you use. It’s amazing, and I just love it.

The words also flow together easily, like they were meant to be strung together. They’re poetic, as they move to their own cadence and keep your mind with his. I like how he relates coming to their house on this night to the last time he came out. I also like how his emotions about James’ death are displayed. Part of him can’t feel pain about it, because James was always mocking him and making him the joke, yet another part does feel sorrow that he’s fallen. Just not in a direct way. And they all add to Snape’s character, to your writing.

The only thing I found a little distracting at times was sentence length. Sometimes a 2-3 line paragraph was composed of a single sentence [with commas and what not] but some of those played with the flow a little bit. It made it difficult to keep some of the same themes of the paragraph together. That and the entire sentence sometimes contained two different descriptions and it made it a bit confusing.

But honestly, I loved this story! I have not read many stories about Snape [none really at all] and I’m really happy I decided to start with this! It was excellent!

And just on a closing note, I’ll share my favorite line, which just so happens to be the last line :)

“It may be darkest before the dawn, but for Severus Snape there will be no more light.”

Beautiful!
~Grimmerz

Author's Response: Oh thankyou so much! I am so glad you liked it, and that it was accessible. I'm also very glad you could see him, why he did everything, and the pain - it was what I really wanted to get across, because it is so often brushed over.

Aw thanks! I'm very glad it worked; it was a different style to what I'm used to, and it was tricky at first. But I did try to create a more poetic style, and I'm glad you liked it :) Hehe thanks! I was trying to show how Snape is still so connected to the past, because the present is so horrific.

Yes, you are very right about the sentences... I need to edit, it was written during my Comma Abuse Era. The paragraphs can be pretty disconnected too, and I just didn't like to use full stops :/

Ahh I'm so happy you liked it! There's not many Snape stories out there and I wanted to add one more.

Thankyou so much, I love favourite-liners, and also for your gorgeous review. It really cheered me up :D
~TGK


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