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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
This was really cute. I'm a sucker for Lily/James stories and Lily's lists as to why she hated James were amusing - she was just desperate for reasons to say she couldn't like him.

I love how her friends and his friends got involved and locked them in a broom cupboard. It's the only way to get people to shut up and actually listen to one another when there's no way out.

I love how ridiculous Lily is, scorning James and then being upset when he rejects her and then finally realizing her own feelings for him. I giggled when their friends opened the cupboard to them snogging.

This was really adorable, and I enjoyed it a lot. The only criticism I have is that you should go through it because there was one or two instances where you switched tenses, so make sure you stay consistent!

Author's Response: Aw thankyou! I'm so glad you liked it :3 It was a lot of fun making up her lists!

Hehe, they were just too stubborn - and I kind of wanted to play on the whole 'broom cupboard cliche', they were definitely not listening ;)

I'm glad you liked that! I wanted to show how she realises she's being silly, and then couldn't resist the comedy moment.

Thankyou! Yes... must edit... :)


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