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Review:Roots in Water says:
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I really enjoyed reading this story and I think you did a great job of capturing Draco as he was as a teenager. I particularly found it interesting the nightmares he experienced as the night of his initiation into the ranks of the Death Eaters approached. The imagery was very well done- the image of Nagini eating Narcissa was horrifying, yet suitable for the subject matter.

I hadn't really thought about all the roles he had had to assume during that time period before but I found it very interesting that he felt as though he would be losing himself. It makes for a very interesting look into his mind, because, as you mentioned, Lucius could be held responsible for ruining the Malfoy line, and Draco must now uphold Lucius' values, not necessarily his.

I enjoyed how you centered the story around the Malfoy Family Tree and the family motto. It had the very powerful effect of explaining Draco's struggle and how his mind works without overtly saying so. The conclusion, the ending sentence, finished this story off brilliantly because it explained, in very little words, what his decision was and how he would be proceeding in his life. "He would be needing his strength"- yes, he certainly would.

I'm glad I read this and I think that you did a fantastic job of explaining an integral part of Draco's life.

Author's Response: Hey! I always love getting reviews from you!

Good, I tried to make the nightmares seem like something that would really bother a person. It's clear from what we know about him in canon that Voldemort would do literally anything to anyone else in pursuing the accomplishment of his purposes, and I think it would be really scary to exist as a pawn in that plan the way that Draco did.

I did try to convey the sense that Draco was helpless and was really realizing for the first time that he was a tool for his father's use. I felt like there would be an undercurrent of resentment running under the facade of pride. He's under a tremendous amount of pressure for a sixteen-year-old, something that is kind of unique to the Death Eaters. The Order was uncomfortable recruiting underage wizards and witches at first, but not so for Voldemort.

Thanks for another very kind review! :)

Amanda


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