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Review:Secret Santa says:
It was a game of survival of the fittest, and he was the furthest from "fittest" that one could get.

I love this line! I really think that this is an interesting way to portray Peter, and I love the parallels that you draw between his character and his rat characteristics. You create a slightly different Peter here from how he's often portrayed, less cowardly in some ways, but he still comes to the same choice in the way. You make his internal struggle really interesting, the struggle over himself which he loses, both when fighting not to transform, and presumably when he tells the sisters what he is doing and switches to Voldemort's side. You create a really interesting situation here, where Peter doesn't set out to betray his friends, but his survival instinct overwhelms his sense of duty.

I really like your characterisation of the two sisters as well. The differences between Narcissa and Bellatrix that you explored were really interesting, as was the exporation of Bellatrix's blind devotion to Voldemort. And I loved all the subtle digs at one another, the relationship between them was really well written. The characterisation in this piece overall was very well done. And it felt so strange to see Dobby in not exactly a villain's role, but he is in some ways the bad guy in this piece.

This review is incredibly rambly, but hopefully I've got some of my thoughts across. The writing style is, as always, absolutely incredibly. Your writing doesn't read as if it has been written, which makes it flow really nicely and makes anything that you have written very easy to read! Although, sometimes, you get a part of the story so truthful or well constructed that you just have to admire it, such as the last few lines. It conveyed really well Peter's fractured thoughts and his mix of emotions, and the really powerful final decision that he makes.

Author's Response: Thank you for this, Secret Santa! It was a wonderful surprise to see this review, and I want you to know that I really appreciate it. ^_^

I'm glad that you like that line - it was perfect for the title and summary, though figuring out how to express that idea in coherent grammar was a challenge. :P I love playing with words and cliched phrases, so I couldn't resist making that the central theme of the story. I had Darwin on the mind for my research at uni, and the whole idea of Peter appearing in most of the story in rat form gave me the idea to make survival the central theme here - the key issue in this story is that Peter chooses survival over everything else, and that's a very natural choice. Not the morally or ethically right choice, but the one that is followed by instinct, something that can't be controlled by society or reason. It's fantastic that you caught that, too, that his choice is one made on a very fundamental level, and while it makes his choice problematic, it offers one explanation as to how/why he became a spy for the Dark Lord.

The sisters in this story ended up stealing the limelight (though Dobby might have, too XD) - they were way too much fun to write, especially together as they are, quibbling and trying to outwit each other in typical sibling fashion. :P I'm glad that their characterizations turned out well because I very rarely write them, particularly not in starring roles like this, so it means a lot to hear a compliment about them. ^_^

Rambly is good. Just look at this response. XD Queen of the ramble over here is extremely thankful for your wonderful present. It means a lot that you liked this story, even the ending (which may need some extra words still, but I'm really glad that you liked it!). Thank you! *huggles*


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