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Review:The Christmas Fairy says:
The Fairy likes imaginative description, and therefore particularly enjoyed this chapter. The French Ministry isn't something that The Fairy has considered before, but the idea that is would be on one the the islands in the Seine seems utterly perfect. Picking somewhere that you have actually been and making that where you set your action was a great idea. I know Paris too, I've also been to those islands, and you made it so vivid for me that I could completely picture what you were describing. First class!

I'm glad that Will/Draco finally has a job - I like him a lot more for it, and I'm glad that he's decided to man-up and go back to England. I can definitely see him as a hit wizard, I think this is a great choice of career for him.

I also like the way you write Henri - his accent is done well, and accents are notoriously difficult, so I think you have done a very good job with it.

There were some small inconsistencies, mostly in terms of diction. Pierre describes Will/Draco as very eloquent, when he has actually been anything but, and he is also described as being extremely competent, but at the same time seems to be operating at a level below his peers. I would prefer him to come in and show off all that experience he has learned as a wandering wizard and knock their socks off:-)

However, I think your teaser for the next chapter was excellent. Will/Draco hunting his own father? Genius:-)

The Fairy will not proceed to chapter 4!

Author's Response: This was one of the only times I've drawn from real life in the story, so I'm really glad you liked the imagery! The French people are so arrogant and proud that their entrance to the Ministry would just have to be somewhere huge, and the Eiffel Tower was a bit over the top, so the islands of the Seine were perfect! And I'm so glad that you thought the decriptions were vivid. Seriously, HUGE compliment right there.

Well, it certainly took him long enough to get a job :P Actually, I got the idea of him not having a proper job because it doesn't seem like Lucius does either. A bit of daddy-son resemblance there. And thank you for the compliment on Henri's accent! It's one of the most annoying things to remember, but I like it all the same. And I shall definitely go in and look at those inconsistensies you pointed out! Thank you, dear!

-Naida

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