|Review:||Toujours Padfoot says:|
THIS IS THE BEST PRESENT EVER OH MY GOD.
I just. Gahh. I don't even.
HOW DO I REVIEW THIS. IT IS LIKE MY FAVORITE ONE-SHOT YOU'VE EVER WRITTEN, AND IT'S LIKE BONUS GALORE THAT YOU WROTE IT FOR ME AS A PREZZIE.
So I am just going to try to string a few coherent phrases together here and there and hope you get the gist of how incredibly blown away I am. The /detail/. Like, I am just sitting here in awe. The format, too, how it goes from the pub back to the street, back to the pub, back to the street. When you showed me a snippet earlier, I don't know /why/ I didn't suspect the man at the bar was Peter, WHAT WAS I THINKING NOT SUSPECTING THAT. I was like, "Well it can't be Sirius because he was apprehended in the street" so typically I forgot that it could be Peter. I don't even. What. -shakes old self-
The showdown was HOMG SO INTENSE. I shall applaud you for ages, the way that you built up to it just right, and then shifted back to the pub, and then again. Christine is the perfect example of an innocent bystander. She has her own past and her own life and she's just walking on her way along the street; and when Andrew advised her to go down to the corner to hear the violinist, with the best of intentions, my heart just sank. Everything was written so marvelously, the red cellophane on the candy cane and the violinist saying "obliged, obliged, obliged". And the woman, I just can't get over when she says that the violinist shouldn't be just playing on corners. It was such a realistic thing to say, it's just so apparent that you really experienced this scene inside your head as you were writing it, because you painted it so vividly. The chocolate chips and how he touched his nose like there was some kind of secret (SO /REAL/, MAN, I'M TELLING YOU, I'VE HAD EXPERIENCES LIKE THESE WITH FRIENDLY OLD MEN BEFORE AND I'VE GOT GOOSEBUMPS NOW) and the broken glass and the crater - and oh my god, that she was upside down with her hand wrapped around something that wasn't there anymore. Just so poignant, that is imagery that is going to stick with me for a long time. This is pretty much canon now.
Sirius and Peter's exchange was perfect, as was Peter's behavior - he's such a frightened little rat, you can tell that he doesn't care /too/ much about what he's done, he just cares about consequences and doesn't want to get caught, doesn't want to be punished. I love how Sirius's wand was described in the eyes of a Muggle, and I love the flash of orange and how a man tried to help Peter up after he fell, and how Peter said sorry about bumping into everyone, and how he still paid for his ale, and how /canon/ everything was. It was just. I can't even. All twelve victims feel so real, like they really existed, like this is how it all went down. None of them were aware of what was happening, of who Sirius and Peter were, or why Sirius had a drumstick, about why they were shouting. They were just living like it was any normal day, and I am so, so pleased and honored to be able to read this scene, exactly how I wanted to read it, and that I was still so impressed by it because it was beyond anything I imagined. I am so, so happy that you wrote this story.
Best one-shot I've ever read. Ever.
♥ You are a brilliant writer - you do such amazing things with words. Don't EVER stop writing.
Author's Response: I am on beyond excited/flattered that you loved this so much, Sarah -- I really and truly am. The whole time I was writing it, I was so afraid of messing up and disappointing you and I nearly scrapped it many, many times. :D
I cannot even do this review justice -- it is very literally impossible. I have read this so many times that I could probably recite chunks of it, and still it's so hard for me to wrap my head around.
OMG THANK YOU FOR LIKING IT I AM REALLY GLAD YOU DO SERIOUSLY YOU ARE THE BEE'S KNEES BUT LIKE A MILLION TIMES BETTER. ♥ I really wish I could thank you better; this is a poor job of it.
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