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Review:megaaan says:
Very cute story - congratulations! I really enjoyed reading this, and I love how it fits so perfectly with canon (Canon is my favourite. Always. ;] Apart from sometimes, when non-canon is extremely well written...)

Perhaps, just as something a little extra, you could explain one or two of the things that ruined the perfect-ness? It would be nice to know what they were - whether they were knowing Voldemort was out to kill them (after Harry's birth), or before that, when they didn't have that to worry about. What could have spoiled these perfect moments for him?

I love the idea of James being "imperiused" by Voldemort, and wondering, and realising that he has no Death Eater qualities. At first, I was a bit worried that he had considered becoming a Death Eater, but I loved the way you had made it that he didn't think like that at all. Maybe, to add even more to this, you could have a proper flashback to just before he was put under the imperius curse? It may give a bit more depth...

I love how much we can see his love for Lily, in just this short chapter, and how he'd do anything to protect her and Harry - even wandless, when he knew he could never survive.

And ugh the last few lines send shivers down my spine - it's a perfect ;) ending! Well done. Hopefully I'll get your next couple of reviews done soon -- sorry it's taking so long!!

- Megan xox

Author's Response: Aw, thankyou! Yes, I ♥ canon too :)

I think that's a great idea, because it doesn't entirely make sense and I love your idea!

Thanks! No, he wasn't considering Death Eaterism, he was just realising that he couldn't have done anything differently to get here! And I like that idea, I think a flashback would work well.

Aw, thanks - it was what I tried to get across, and I hated writing James wandless, but protective :(

Thanks so much Mummy! :D

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