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Review:Atomic says:
Hello again!

This chapter was so sweet. I really liked how you brought them together.

The dialogue was wonderful! I loved the flirting. It was so realistic, because it was slightly awkward in some places. I hate it when people write flirting perfectly. That's never how it goes. This was just so natural and the flow was beautiful.

I do have a couple of critiques though. The first is that Teddy said "I love you." I know this is the end of the story, but it felt way too soon for that. I know he's older, but this is their first date. It just seemed really out of place. The other thing that I'm not fond of is the title and story summary. This is an awesome story, and I'm so glad you asked me to read it. But to be honest, I would have never picked it out of the archives to read. The title is a bit cliche and the summary doesn't really tell us much about the story. I really do suggest editing them. They just don't seem to match your story very well.

I really liked Victoire's character, though. She was very bold, and yet you could still tell she was very nervous at the same time. It was a good mixture of the too. I'm glad you didn't make her the cliche very beautiful and into herself- type of girl.

Anyway, marvelous job!!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review!

And, ugh, yeah, I know. I am terrible at summaries. Just awful. I'm trying to come up with a different one...

Thanks again for the review. :)

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