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Review:forsakenphoenix says:
Oh, this was sweet. I'm glad that Fleur's worry was for nothing. I knew nothing would happen, of course, but it was still nice to see Fleur's observation of a boy she had once "dated".

I guess part of me wished that there was a bit more interaction between the two characters. You did build up this whole thing in Fleur's mind about how their reunion would go and while it was sweet and not unexpected, it was a bit...of a let-down? I don't know. I guess I just wanted more Fleur/Roger!

I really enjoyed when you wrote in the whole family. I could just imagine the kitchen beginning to fill with loved ones and how loud the conversation would be around the table with all of them and it was nice of them to include Roger in their conversation and not make him feel awkwardly out of place.

Oh, also! I liked when Fleur woke up in the morning and slipped her feet into Bill's slippers. I think something like that just shows how comfortable they are with each other and it's just really cute. :)

This was such a nice, light-hearted story. Definitely different from your usual angst and it was a lovely change. Nicely done!

Author's Response: You make a good point in that the big meeting was a little anticlimactic. I did that on purpose, though; I wanted to emphasize that Fleur worried and worried over a five-second exchange that meant next to nothing. At the end of the day, she's got her loving family and a happy life, and everything turned out okay.

I'm happy that you liked my light-hearted work. I wanted to see if I could actually write a 12+ story without "spicing" it up with more mature elements. Apparently I succeeded :)

Thanks for your wonderful reviews!

Amanda


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