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Review:Beeezie says:
Hey, this is Beeezie, here with your requested review!

I liked this story. Your portrayal of Narcissa was excellent - her disdain for muggle-borns, her feelings about the house-elves, and the way she felt about her sisters was perfect. I also liked the way that you portrayed her relationship with Lucius as being loving and caring. They had a lot of flaws, but being unable to love their family was certainly not one of them.

I do wish that you'd gone a little deeper into Narcissa's relationship with her sisters. Again, I liked the way she felt, and I thought it was well done, but I wanted to know why Bellatrix wanted Narcissa to do poorly, and I wanted to know what Narcissa's relationship with Andromeda was. I also was confused about why she was so hesitant to tell Lucius, and wanted to see more reassurance in his response.

On the whole, though, great story. :)

Author's Response: Hey Beeezie! Thanks for stopping by to review :)

I'm so glad you liked my portrayal of Narcissa. I really love her character and I'm glad I got her right. I also agree that the relationship she had with Lucius had its flaws but was on the whole a good one.

I appreciate your critique as well. This piece was more focused on Narcissa and Lucius, but I have thought of writing a piece that focuses on the three sisters. I'm sorry the Lucius/Narcissa dynamic confused you a little, though. I was trying to get across the idea of having to put a face on for a proper pureblood courtship and that Narcissa didn't need to do that because he genuinely cares for her. I didn't want to soften him up too much, but perhaps I should have made him a little more sympathetic.

Thanks again for your thoughtful and quick review! :)

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