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Review:charlottetrips says:
What a beautiful opening! ďchartreuseĒ! Love it!

Your prose is quite delicious. The simple descriptions yet apt words really takes me into the moment as Hermione is experiencing them. Iím quite enjoying the shortened clauses and almost reminiscent feel to the atmosphere you are setting.

Wow. I donít even know what to say. The pain and struggle that Hermione is having with herself was imbued through every part of this 500 word one-shot. I can definitely feel the heartache that Hermione is trying not to let touch her. And the final paragraphs, where she is pulling herself together, shows the courage of Hermione as Iíve come to know her.

How you describe Hugo brings me to think of him as some special and favorite child (which you did put in there) but also with the ďa single reed in a field of grassĒ statement, I could suddenly see that he wasnít just special because his mother was singling him out but because he IS.

I guess Iíll have to get back to ďItís Called AdventureĒ to realize the full significance of this piece. But either way, this was lovely.

xChar

Author's Response: Hi!!

Love the word chartreuse. I think as a color it's one of the most powerful images you can employ because it's such a vivid thing without needing any other explanation--whereas electric blue is just blue, but electrified. Chartreuse is inherently alive. (And now we see why my papers are always a page or two too long...)

I'm so glad that the emotions really happen for you--I don't really know what overtook me but suddenly I had to sit down and write this. I had no plan, which is what I think makes it especially amazing to read these reviews--things are working in this story that I didn't even plan, but they're all moving towards the general aim I sought. It's amazing.

My take on Hugo is that he's a bit of an outcast but he's a very innocent and lovely kid; whereas Rose seems more sharpish to me, I think Hermione would feel like she needed to protect Hugo, who isn't, let's say, the brightest :D

I think this story may actually be more of a pleasant companion to adventure than a compulsory backstory, but by all means, go for it and give it a read! :P

Thanks so much for leaving a review, I appreciate it a lot :)


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