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Review:Salem says:
Agnes here with your review!

I liked the overall tone of this chapter. It made me feel all warm and comfortable, like I was living their cozy home life right alongside them.

As for Fleur's character, I think you've pretty much got it. Always strives to be the best, to outshine others, has that stubbornness and has her French accent! Check, check and check.

This first chapter was very interesting, I have to say--I couldn't stop reading it once I started. You start with background to the home life, how Fleur's muffin making became part of the family tradition, and then set up for conflict near the end. Nothing particularly eventful happens until the end of the chapter, but somehow that fits in very well with the overall mood. Ohhh, I can't wait to see how things go over when Davies arrives for brunch!

I think my favorite part of this chapter was the description of all of the muffins. So delicious, my mouth was basically watering just reading about them! Made me want to go out and buy some. Especially blueberry ones.

Looking forward to the next update!

Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for your very prompt review :)

Warm and comfortable is sort of what I was going for, so it's great to hear that it worked for you! I always imagined their home as being a happy place, especially considering that it's where the trio elected to go following their escape from the horrors of Malfoy Manor.

I'm also happy that you thought I nailed Fleur down okay. I was a little worried about the accent, but I definitely tried :) I wanted her to be a nice protagonist but also retain her canon ways, and it sounds like I succeeded.

So pleased to see that it held your interest! I realize that a lot of it is set-up, but more action will be coming in the next two chapters, I promise. Brunch should definitely be interesting with Roger Davies there :)

Yay, my description worked! I put a lot of effort into it. Blueberry muffins are delicious!

I hope you return for another review when parts 2 and 3 are uploaded. Thanks again! :)

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