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Review:notreallyblonde44 says:
Hello again! It is me, notreallyblonde44 here to do those reviews I promised you ages ago for wining my challenge. I picked this story on a whim...and my, my, do I want to vomit. At first I thought Hester was a child, so thank GOODNESS I was wrong about that dumb assumption. Then I would have seriously vomited. Like TenthWeasley wrote in her review, I am super creeped out by Florian now. "WHY DOES HE GIVE HARRY FREE ICE CREAM" -I will equally never be the same because of this fact.

Despite wanting to wipe my memory clean of this horror of a man, this is a brilliant one-shot nevertheless! The writing was fluid and strangely whimsical (not pleasant, but unearthly eerie I suppose). The way that you manipulate time and space within Florian's mind is brilliant. His unreliability as a narrator was well done also, especially since he's such a disturbing creeper/lurker with that camera of his. Poor, Hester, the dead woman didn't even see it coming.

My favorite aspect of this one-shot was the way in which color was repeated and used. The shades of red, pinks, and white/creams were vibrant and helped create the connectivity between the storyline and characters. It was beautiful imagery and I liked the ways the colors turned to express the changes in the narrative and Florian's fanciful idea of life.

I must admit that I've written something much like this in the past and your work reminds me a lot of my own in the sense that the male OC is completely barmy, but in such a short amount of time, you've made it so believable that what he thinks is reality quickly becomes reality when Hester is forced to be apart of his insanity. What a well-executed and well-written one-shot! I don't really have anything, that I can remember, to critique about it :P

Best,
notreallyblonde44
(Slytherin)

Author's Response: Wow, thank you for the incredibly thorough review. Haaa Hesper certainly is not a child, or else this story would violate tos and I would get into some pretty major trouble. Eww.

Creepers and lurkers, to me, frighten me more than psychos with gun sprees. Something about not knowing that a person is stalking you, watching you through your window, is more frightening than blood and gore. The Lovely Bones was a huge inspiration for this story, because it didn't show any kind of bloodshed, and yet, it was an absolute nightmare.

Plus - FREE ICE CREAM. HE GAVE HARRY FREE ICE CREAM every half hour. It's like...that's a lot of ice cream. For free. Eww, Florean, what's your angle. -_-

Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. :)

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