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Review:Harrypotterbookworm says:
Oh Lily, how you know how to play with my feelings. A hopelessly in love best friend, an actual good best friend to be in love with, it all equals this wonderful piece of writing.

Your characterization of Louis seems spot on. I love the description at the start of what he is like and how he would kill you with his wonderful-ness. It reminds me of a friend I have actually, and it also sets up the story really well. The problem with these stories sometimes is that the 'best friend' that they are in love with, actually isn't that nice a person, and also relating to Louis's personality, is that their ignorance is born out of meanness, not niceness. But the thing is, none of this happened with you. Louis was believable, and you could really relate as to why Annie stayed with him all this time. So amazing job!

The only thing I noticed was with the fluidity of the ending into the main body. It seemed a little ... forced, I guess, as if you wanted them to get together, now! rather then waiting for a little longer. Don't get me wrong, it's very sweet and cute and I like it, but yeah, it's a little out of character.

I LOVE the whole yoghurt shop idea, I swear I went and ate some yoghurt right after wards. It was a great quirky theme to have going through the story and in bought in a lot of originality as well.

Overall, really, REALLY cute and sweet and argh! Oh yes, and I loved Annie's personality! So realistic and and easy to relate to. Amazing job! Hugs,

- HPB (otherwise known as nikkinike from Ravenclaw) ;D

Author's Response: NIKKI HELLO MY LOVE~

So to be honest I don't know where this came from except for the line about yogurt/supercup whatever it was for the challenge :P I do not usually indulge in fluff, because I am not, in my opinion, as good at it as other things, like pure silliness or creepy things or angst or just weirdness.

I think that I probably did force them together...at first I wasn't sure that there would be this whole *~*REVEAL*~* POOF!BOOM!SPARKLE!LOVE! moment, so, I can see that it's a problem -eyeroll at myself-

I love froyo! It's so weird to imagine that I actually wrote a story about it but hey, in order for the franchise to have gotten as big as it is somebody had to have had a dream once, right? Why couldn't it be this little wild child? :P

Thanks so much for your review and i am TERRIBLY sorry that I'm so late in responding!

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