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Review:Why So Sirius says:
Pottersinsomniac here with your requested review :O

Alright, so with the characterization, I can only really comment on Narcissa's, since she was the one speaking. I could really tell how confused she was and purely worried for her family and their future. It was a fairly good story, and you can

There are a few things I'd like to point out, though.
First, the battle occured at the end of Draco's seventh year, (I believe in May) so Draco would've been out of Hogwarts after Bellatrix's death. I would say this could've been straight after the battle, but the Malfoy family left before Voldemort died.
Oh, and this next thing is sort of pointless... but I think this is actually 12+. I didn't see swearing in it or anything so yeah...

Overall, though, I like it! You could definitley see Narcissa's personality in this!

-Britney (pottersinsomniac)

Author's Response: Thanks for your review!

As far as the timing, the inspiration for this one-shot came from pg. 745 in DH (US Edition). It's the scene of the day after the battle, and the bodies are being moved and people are having reunions all over the place. Toward the bottom of the page, there is a line that mentions that the Malfoys were "huddled together" and looking "unsure" about being there, with no one paying them any attention.

I chose the 15+ because of the sensitive subject... dead relatives and friends described in some detail, primarily. I figured it was best to err on the side of caution.

Thanks again for the review! I really appreciate it! :)

academica


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