I want to leave you these awesome reviews but every time I read your stories, I'm always at a loss for words. I remember reading parts of this fic for the Figment contest. I'm not a very big Sirius/Lily fan (you know this :P) but this story made me so sad. The ending especially was heartbreaking. That last line killed me! I think I might have said that on your Figment piece but it's true. I love the Marauders but it depresses me because they all end up dead and any happiness you can write for them, you know it's fleeting. I'm not a big fan of second person POV and this story was tolerable but I still don't like it very much except for that last line. I don't know...second person POV is something very intimate and in a way, that's how your story feels but at the same time it gives it a sort of disconnect. I can't really explain the feeling, sorry. :(
I love your writing though, as always. It's flawless and beautiful and your characterizations are fantastic. I love your Sirius - acknowledging that what he wants belongs to someone else but then at the end, saying if he had loved her, he would have saved her. So sad.
I'm pretty sure I'm rambling and this review makes no sense but like I said earlier, I have no idea what to say when I read your stories. I love your writing! :)
Author's Response: They're so horrible that they make all the words in your head shrivel up, you mean? :P Maybe that's the problem I have with getting reviews, haha.
Just kidding, of course. Getting a review from you is a wonderful present, and it means so much that you read and reviewed something of mine. ^_^ You were the first reviewer here to shove me in the right direction, so I'm eternally thankful to you.
I realize now that a Sirily story may not have been the optimal suggestion for a Wolfstar shipper. XD It makes me wonder why I don't write Sirius/Remus (though I know the answer to that already: mine would never be as good as yours). However, it's fantastic that this story, even with the things that aren't to your usual taste, still affected you. I know a lot of people aren't for the second person, and even I'm still touch and go with it - it only suits certain stories, those that require a huge amount of intimacy with the reader. Sirius is confessing his heart to Lily in his madness, and it is, in a way, meant to make readers feel uncomfortable, like they're disturbing something. That's why the ending is so creepy - it suddenly reveals how the reader is intruding on this intensely private narrative. The reader isn't Lily, and that's where the disconnect you mentioned comes from - the story is meant for her ears, but she can never actually hear it.
I only came up with this explanation now, wow. The ending was one part I wasn't sure about because it's so abrupt and drastically switches the mood into this dark space of madness and suffering. I personally love that aspect of the Marauders - that there is always that darkness at the end. They're so transient, undergoing that tragic fall because, even though they had so much going for them, they were still human and flawed. The Marauders' story would make for a great play, whether Greek or Elizabethan. XD
Anyway, thank you for reading and reviewing. It's wonderful to hear from you! ^_^