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Review:GinnyWeasleyxxx says:
Hello! I'm here for your review!

So I definitely like the plot of this, and the writing is very good. Very descriptive too.

1. About the emotions. Most of them were very believable, but I think you can work on describing them even more. I would have like to have seen her discuss the things Harry Potter did for the family even more, because I think that was very crucial for the Malfoys, but that's only my opinion. Overall, I think the emotion came through very well.

2. Narcissa's emotions were very very believable, considering everything that happened in the seventh book. She was portrayed extremely well and you are an awesome writer when it comes to that.

3. The pacing was a little bit quick, but not overly fast or awfully slow. The transtitions were really great, and I liked how it was sort of her thoughts, then reality, then more thoughts and so on. Great job!

I really enjoyed it!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I definitely appreciate it!! I have been trying to work more description into my work, so I am pleased to see that I've gotten a bit better at conveying emotion, and I will continue to work on it even more. I also appreciate your comment on the pacing; I'm glad it didn't go unpleasantly quick for you. I'm also glad you liked the transitions; I tried to write it in a bit of a stream-of-consciousness format and I was afraid they wouldn't come through well. Thanks again so much, and glad you enjoyed it! :)

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