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Review:wenderbender says:
Oh my. I must admit, I had an inkling of this happening, after Jayde's, ehem, encounter with Malfoy. But seriously, could it be that she's really so sheltered she didn't realize she was pregnant for two months? Didn't she miss her period and stuff? Or did Ms. Fitzpatrick never give her "the talk"? It seems a little unlikely to me that she wouldn't have noticed SOME changes in her body, even if she wasn't showing yet. Maybe you could go back and add a few indicators in the last chapter, or in this chapter have her think something like, "now I know why my period was so late." Something like that would make it more believable.

Other than that detail, I think you did a good job with the whole thing. Mrs. McGreggor's and Ms. Fitzpatrick's reactions were realistic, and fit their personalities. I also liked your description of the appointment at St. Mungo's. The booklets and posters were a nice touch.

But oh dear, Jayde, what now! What now?!

xoxo wenderbender

Author's Response: Well, Jayde IS a bit naive. After all, Draco's the first boy she's ever kissed, let alone done anything else with. I was that way myself at her age; my mom didn't give me the 'talk', I got all my information from my best friend in 9th grade. :-( *blushes* And again, before the story got edited, there were LOADS of signs; Jayde was throwing up a lot and she noted that she'd missed a period. But, once again, I tried to be a people pleaser. People told me that it wasn't realistic to have a pregnant woman start throwing up all the time. And since I've never been pregnant, I tried to take the advice of the ones who'd been there. I really, really put too much store in what other people say, instead of just writing my story the way I want it.

Thanks for another awesome review, dear!!

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