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Review:notreallyblonde44 says:
'ello, SamMalfoy/TheHeirofSlytherin! It's me notreallyblonde44 from the forums here to do those reviews I promised you from way back when *heh* I'm sorry these are so delayed! I've been in a reviewing rut, so let's hope these are up to par!

First chapter read and complete; I didn't realize this was a series until the second chapter posted haha. I must admit I'm glad you made it into a series. I think this first chapter sets off a nice complicated whirlwind plot. Aldo, with where the first chapter stands, there is definitely more that can be done with such a storyline. I feel that rumors, gossips, and reporters will be prevalent throughout the fic and poor James. It's bad enough his family is on every mag, now his sexuality is. That's a terrible thing; it's like high-press bullying. Not cool :(

LOL Albus' Scorpius reference was hysterical, especially since so many (myself included) ship them in fanfic.

So far the pace of the story overall has such a nice feel to it. Very easy to read, I feel like I'm seeing a lot of what's going on. There could be a hint more detail and description here and there, like James' room or the house in general for instance, but the story is not hindered by these missing details...I'm just a description nut :P

As far as characters go, Lily is such a brat! It's entertaining and I love the way gossip runs through the family like the wind or something. Very quick and very unstable. Poor James. I like how Albus tries to defend him, which says a lot about his character. I curious about the development of James and Oliver's friendship already, especially considering the ending and that little thought that Oliver leaves James with. Interesting indeed!

Hmm the constructive points: definitely throw in some plot twists and keep James dynamic! I can kind of see plausible ways for this story to go already and while I will enjoy the ride with whatever way it does go, I hope the story keeps a fresh perspective :) I'm glad James isn't that typical James-Sirius carbon copy that we see in so my NextGen fics, so keep that up! A hint of more description wouldn't hurt like I wrote above, but otherwise this is a fun start -keep it up! Also, I didn't catch any surface errors, which is always a plus! Onto the next chapter :)

Best,
NRB

Author's Response: Hey, NRB.

It wasn't meant to be a series, but I'm glad it is too. Complicated? Definitely LOL. Yes, poor James, I do feel sorry for James, but, let's not forget, he is a Potter. He's tough, I'm sure he'll be fine. :)

It's definitely not cool. You can never trust the press and what they say.

Albus/Scorpius. I ship them too. :D Won't happen in this story, though. I have plans for those two...

Description is my enemy, but I'm working on it. And we will be coming back to the house and James' bedroom.

I've read so many stories where Lily is quiet and nice, she needed to be a brat in this story; it's so much fun. Albus and James will fight and argue, as all sibling do (I know!), but they're really close. It'll show more as the story progresses. I think it's safe to say that James and Oliver's new "relationship" is going to be... Interesting. Definitely not the easiest.

There are absolutely (I say definitely way too much :P) going to be twists in this story. ;)

Thanks for reviewing,

Heir.

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