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Review:charlottetrips says:
charlottetrips, from the forums, here for your review! Sorry it took me so long to get through this—work and all—but I have now finished reading up to here!

First of all, let me tell you how impressed I was at the basis of your story, steeping it in the American Revolution and taking the time to research it out—what with the clothes, the places and other such details. This is certainly an undertaking, though I seem to get that you’re a bit of a history buff, no?

One thing you should watch out for that I saw in reading through the chapters is that Ezekiel’s inner thoughts sounded a bit too modern at times. One such line is, “I felt as though I reality was hitting me, moment by moment.” There’s a bit of the grammatical error but there it also seems more of a 20th to 21st century type of statement, at least to me. For some reason, the idea I get it should be is “Moment by moment, I could truly feel the cold and harsh circumstances of my situation.” You know, something like that.

Right now, I’m just feeling pitiful of Ezekiel. Hopefully, he grows some *ahem* in the coming chapters, eh? His family life is interesting, the obvious tension between them something I would like to be explained fully at some point. I mean, I get that part of it comes from him being a wizard and all that but still. What happened to Thomas?

I liked how you explained Benedict’s rank. I would have no idea what a First Left Lieutenant was if you hadn’t put in that description afterwards.

Otherwise your attention to detail is admirable (only 1 spelling error I could see as above) and your writing, at times, is actually quite remarkable especially the paragraph in the last bit of this chapter describing the lowering of the old lady’s coffin.

Keep going! This would be very interesting to see the direction it goes.

x Char

Author's Response: Oh, no it's quite alright! Let me apologize for taking so long to reply to this! :) I am most certainly a history buff (historical archaeologist, specifically ;] ), with the War of American Independence being a VERY large focus as well as 18th century Britain. I love researching, so the fact that this requires research in an area I love is just PERFECT.

Ah, yes. Thanks for catching the anachronisms. They sometimes slip in there when I'm in a good groove, and I don't catch them because I'm too excited to move forward!

Oh, he certainly grows. Or, he may not grow as much as you think. I love being vague. -skips off- There is so much tension between all of his family members, and I'll leave that there. Ezekiel's elder brother Thomas contracted the hereditary disease that his mother has and died when he was around 13.

Char, thank you SO much for your compliments! They made me smile. :) I appreciate it sooo soo very much, and I will certainly let you know, if you'd like, when there's more up!

- Ginni

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