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Review:baletgir says:
That was a really nice read. I really liked it. I am a bit confused as to what the numbers were. mini-chapters? I do think you need some separation between each part, but the numbers don't seem like the right choice. So obviously Rose was the girl and Scor was the guy she ended up with, but I would love to know who she was with originally. And I would also love to know more about that relationship, why did he break it off, was it really as awful as she described it or was she just bitter? But to include these I think you would have to expand at least into a short story. This is currently even a bit long for a one-shot, so you may want to consider breaking it up into chapters for a short story.
Good Job!
:)BaletGir

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Yes maybe numbers were not the best way to separate everything, I was so tired of how I always separated things with *'s so I wrote out the numbers instead. I might go back and edit that.

I didn't give much information as to who the guy was originally because I wanted the reader to kind of come up with their own ideas about the guy and what he did. I have my own idea of what a guy could do that would break my heart the most, but I want the reader to imagine it's their worst nightmare happening to them, not mine.

I do agree it could've been better if I had developed him more as a main character and I'll probably go back and add in a scene about him, I just have to figure out where to fit it.

Thank you for your helpful review! I really appreciate it :)
-Rebecca


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