hello darling! here i am! i shall attempt to formulate some sort of sensible review for such a wonderful piece.
firstly, thank you so much for taking part in my challenge. i am pleased that you stepped out of your comfort zone and tried something new and wow, were you successful.
i think if this had have been told in 3rd person it would have lost something, so the choice to use 1st person was the right one. the emotion in this is so real. it is subtle but tangible, just there on the surface but it runs so much deeper. i have never read a Fenrir quite like this and he is a character that i have never really considered before. while i was reading this, like i said in my blog, i could not help but think how right this all felt. like this was really his story. you did a wonderful job!
i love the idea of his mother. it makes him human that even now, when he has become what he is, he is shamed and doesn't want her to hear him or know what sort of creature he is. and i love that she still insists he is beautiful. as a mother, i can see how that is, because i would love my child no matter what. it actually made me a bit teary, reading those scenes.
one of the things that really stood out for me and made me go, oh! was the comment about Fenrir not being able to read. i teach low literacy kids - 13 years olds who can barely read a thing, so i know how real the emotion and the struggle behind such a thing is. including that small detail made me feel so sad for Fenrir!
i really love the metaphor at the end - "and i will soon be painted, too". heartbreaking! so terribly tragic. even though Fenrir is the bad guy, all through this i wanted something good for him, and that, my dear, is why you won this challenge. all the little things you included just made me feel for him, and made me want to give him a hug! i never thought i would feel any sort of sympathy towards such a character but you completely humanised him.
beautiful work. you should be really proud of this piece. thank you so much for writing it!
I shall be attacking your one-shots very soon!!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! And for the challenge, and for selecting me as winner. I am very honored. :) It was tricky to take a character I hated so much (in my novel, he's pretty much written as the devil) and step into his shoes, and somehow manipulate the reader to pity him. But really, it wasn't so hard. I remember reading about him in Deathly Hallows when he and the other snatchers found Harry, Ron, and Hermione, and thinking, "He doesn't sound very educated." And then I remembered about how the Whomping Willow had been planted specifically for Remus at Hogwarts, and that it had been alluded to that Remus was the first werewolf to successfully attend Hogwarts, as well as the last. So where does that leave Fenrir? I think that if he had gone to school, he would have sounded more...intelligent. He would have been able to use the tools he's acquired to make the most of his life, like Remus did. But after thinking about it, I don't think Fenrir went to Hogwarts at all. Just knowing that at one time, he had been normal, and then attacked by another werewolf...he must have had a really messed up past. But it would make the most sense that it happened to him when he was young, and after that he didn't have any good influences around him to help him cope, because if he'd had a warm upbringing that taught him how to make the most of it, he wouldn't have turned out the way he did. It just seemed like the logical story to me.
Thank you so much for creating this challenge. It really opened me up to new ways of writing and I enjoyed it a lot. :)