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Review:electricfeel says:
Hi, electricfeel here with your review. Sorry it's taken so long to get back to you, just been a little busy.

Anyway, I really enjoyed this chapter. It felt unique and interesting, it all flowed so well that I was completely lost in the story at one point and your descriptions were fantastic. I especially loved the line "as though the sun had never been anything more than a rumour". Really good.

Your main character Madeline (or Maddy, or Grey! haha) has been set up really well. She obviously has family issues that have been touched upon here and there, that intrigue the reader to read more. But it's Elliot who really steals the show. He really is a fantastic OC; he's likeable, interesting, funny, charming. Personally, I find him completely fascinating, I can't wait to read more of him!

The plot itself was rather lovely. The dancing in the rain, the meeting a new boy, the finding refuge in a small cafe. It's all very sweet. But then, there's this more mysterious side; how big a role does Alice play? What's going on with her dad? Raising big questions like this early on really pulls in your reader, I think you've handled the plot really well.

Overall, I thought this was perfect as it is. I hate doing a review with offering CC but I don't think you need to change a thing. If anything, I would say that you seem to be on the right track with this first chapter and I'm sure the other chapters should follow on nicely from it.

Author's Response: Oh god, you are honestly too sweet. I almost think that's what scares me most about this story-it feels so long ago that I typed this that I can almost read it as an outsider. Elliot and Grey seem to own me more than the other way round which is sodding intimidating. Nonetheless, thankyou so so much for another lovely review. You send my confidence flying =/

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