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Review:gingersnape says:
Gingersnape again with reviews for you!

Before I begin my ego boosting, nit picking, and all of the stuff in between, I'm going to admit that I'm Team Scorpius all the way. He just gets Rose so much, and I'm worried Cody will just get bored and break her heart... or worse... be the perfect gentleman and Rose will want to be with Scorp, but Scorp will be gone and have given up on Rose... so I'm Team Scorp! So warning, I might be a wee bit biased in my review.

Okay, on to the actual review of this chapter, which I again, have a few things to whine about, but despite that, I really do enjoy reading this story. And as a warning, this could be another long review. I'm not very god at keeping reviews short, but somehow you managed to make it out of the last one alive =]

I loved loved loved that her first kiss was with Scorpius! That is so adorable, and it made me think about how Scorp must feel, knowing that he had kissed her and she was still oblivious to his affections! Gah! It really added to how oblivious Rose can be and strengthened that flaw, which are just as important as her strengths, but much more difficult to write.

The note passing was cute, and exactly how things are done when you are thirteen, but it felt like it rambled too much to be entirely realistic, from my memory of note passing. I remember them being short and all of those points would have been brought up after a reply. Not sure if that's how notes normally are, but that one felt a little off.

The fight between Matt and Emily felt very in character for thirteen year olds like them, so points for doing that well, and I really wonder what twist their relationship took. However, the transiton from talking about their fight and Hogwarts gossip to Rose getting ready seemed a bit rough, but once it got into the actual makeover, it seemed nice and smooth again.

Poor Scorp! Oh Rose, why don't you get that your being with Cody has something to do with his being unhappy! And Scorp is juts so sweet for accepting that Rose is happy and he will accept Cody ish, if it means Rose will be happy! Speaking of Cody, the kiss felt a little forced and early, but I suppose if it makes Rose happy, she won't mind..

I didn't really like the new mood Rose seemed to have, when she picked up on the whole Scorp-Cody thing. It felt unexpected that she would have such an epiphany without any explanation. And I doubt Cody would go complaining to Rose, because that might feel like tattle taleing and especially at his age, Cody would want to prove that he could handle his own fights on his own. In fact, I think he would try an hide that eh had even had a little disagreement with Scorp, unless his head was really big.

Anyway, apart from the spots I've mentioned, the chapter flows pretty well, and I didn't catch too many spelling or grammar mistakes. The spacing took a while to get used to, but HPFF has been having some spacing problems, so I wouldn't worry about them if it would be difficult to fix.

I really enjoyed reading the latest on Rose and the happenings at Hogwarts, and I'm excited to read on!
-ginger

Author's Response: Thanks! A lot of people have reviewed saying that they are Team Scorp. No one likes Cody... oh well. I kind of hate him too...

The fact that Rose's first kiss was with Scorpius kind of leads into their relationship, I'll probably have a flashback at some point soon.

The note passing thing is kind of weird. I added the rambling to show that Cody was kind of nervous talking to Rose, but now that you mention it, I see it. Thank you!

Matt and Emily, I'll probably be posting the little one/two shot soonish. They eventually get back together.

Yeah, I know the kiss was weird, but its kind of to show that with Cody things are a bit weird, and also as a catalyst for Scorpius to talk about his feelings.

Thank you so much for the whole comment on the fight-let, that was a hard part to write. I really wanted something to happen, but yeah, I'll change it.

Thank you, this chapter was pretty rough, I typed it up one morning when I woke up super early, so it's a bit spazzy.

Thank you so much, I love your reviews!
Olwyn

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