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Review:Jenna822 says:
Hello! Here with your review.

I'm really excited about this story. I've been seeing a lot of really good 12+ stories and Teddy/Molly seems intriguing! Plus, your summary was really catchy and pulls me in.

Nice set up with the Teddy/Vic situation. It was abrupt and answered a slew of questions in a very quick (albeit satisfying) way. It also really established a tone for Teddy. His reaction set his character.

The menu part was a bit confusing for me. I read it back three times, but I still don't think I got the full effect of what you were trying to portray. The parts about the plate did well to help establish their character. I like Molly! The idea that she isn't one of those Pick at your food on a date types is refreshing.

As for the ending, it was alright. On a personal preference, I'd have enjoyed the walking away ending, but this one wasn't lacking in any way. One thing I felt like I missed in it was description. I know Teddy likes sugar in his tea, but not what color his eyes are.

Other than that, I thought it was a nice piece. It was fluffy and sweet and had a point (as a lot of fluff doesn't) and I thought you wrote it very well. One thing I look for in a one shot is the ability of it to become a bigger fic. I believe this is one of them. I could see the potential for this carrying on, so well done. :D --Jenna

Author's Response: Thank you very much for the review! I really appreciate that you took the time to be so thorough, especially for such a short story. It's fantastic to hear that the summary was catchy, as I usually have a lot of trouble with writing them, so I'll definitely remember to keep using this style. :D

I think that the menu part was meant to show how neither Teddy nor Molly is conventional - I've seen so many movies where the man ends up choosing the best meal for the woman, and she just accepts it. Molly sets up Teddy to choose for her, but when he doesn't, she's pleased, as though he's passed a test. Does that make more sense?

Haha, it's so strange that people don't prefer the happy ending! I'm so often told that I never write happy endings, but when I do, they're not satisfactory - maybe it's just me not having my heart in it. I liked the idea of them just walking away from one another, but at the same time, what would be the point of the story? As for description - I rarely ever describe a character's appearance, not unless it's important to plot or character development. In this story, it didn't seem necessary, so I left it up to the reader to decide.

Thank you again for your review! :)


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