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Review:padfoot4ever says:
Ah you got me! You really really got me Susan, well done!
I suppose that's my first comment on this story, the thin line between fantasy and reality that you've definitely blurred - I really thought Molly and Teddy were holding hands in the restaurant, really discussing his place or hers. Really nicely done, I have to say!
I love how there is nothing perfect about Molly and Teddy. For one, she is going out with her cousin's ex-husband, which has to be taboo! The awkwardness between them really shines through in your writing, I think you've really captured that feeling when you start something romantic with someone you've thought of platonically for so long. I like how the candlelight shows "every flaw" and Teddy's "coffee stained teeth". Usually with fluffy romantic stories, the author is in danger of describing every "flawless complexion" and "pearly whites". Your characters are very very real and I really enjoyed this!
Excellent!

Author's Response: I got you! :O Wow! That's just... awesome!

I didn't know whether I would be able to with Molly's fantasy - there's a strange alteration in Teddy's personality that I was worried would be too drastic. But that it worked... *squees* I'm very happy for that.

The flaws were definitely something I wanted to highlight in this story. I remember seeing a blog post on the forums about the lack of stories about candlelight dinners, and so this turned out to be a rather exaggerated "realistic" date. It's very awkward, very taboo (Molly just packs it in - makes me wonder what Teddy will think of her after the kiss is over), and I hope that it's different from the norm. :D

Thanks very much for reviewing this! It means huge amounts to hear your opinions on my stories. ^_^


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