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Review:Margravine says:
Susan! It is not ok that I did not know this was up! It was pure accident I stumbled across your post in my usual UFG stalking, and while I got ridiculously excited when I saw you were writing Lily, I was doing a mental jig when I realised this was a companion to WTA!

It was incredible. I can understand why it would be troubling to write, because it's really very dark and driven by a more twisted, overt sensuality than any of your other pieces. You managed to pull that off tastefully as well, so much fanfic is just luridly and gratuitously graphic, but you conveyed all their illict passion even more powerfully by not showing us every little detail - I don't know how you balance between vivid description and knowing restraint, but you really have got that mastered!

It was gripping and absolutely fascinating to get a look in Lily's head. She's SUCH a brat, but first person really did make it much easier to see where she is coming from.

I loved the continual comparisons Lily made between herself and Rose, most especially the 'Rose wouldn't even be here': the Lydia/Elizabeth parallel works so, so well! I was curious as to how you would end it, but the ending was perfect - everything built up to it, and I can't wait to see how it compares to WTA - if they'd actually got married WTA would have lost some of it's tension, even with readers knowing Elizabeths get their Darcys.

I really enjoyed reading this, and my final tribute is that I even feel sorry for Lily - she can't even pretend completely to herself that she has won. Lovely, lovely job - not that I expected anything less from you!

Author's Response: Jo! :O A review from you is a real treat, and it's fantastic that you took the time to read and review this story, thank you! Haha, I think I have to advertise more or something, since people keep finding my stories in the weirdest of ways. XD

Stories like this come out of me every so often and the disturbing part is wondering where they came from, what part of the subconscious they exist. Freud would have a lot of fun stuff to say about this story. o_O

With the description, I go as far as my prudish mind will let me, and also as far as I think that Lily would allow her descriptions to go. Not that she's prudish, but that she doesn't want to say too much, nor does she know how - she's very naive about sex and tries to hide that fact. I was worried for a lot of the time writing this that it would tip the scales into PWP, and that restrained things as well.

Your comment on tension in WTA has got me thinking. I've had problems with the plotting beyond the day of the wedding - how any relationship between Teddy and Rose builds (and maybe falls), and what Scorpius will do next in regard to Rose. But the idea of the tension makes me want to change the timeline completely. XD A postponement of the wedding may have to do, though a cancellation isn't out of the question with Scorpius kept in mind.

Thank you for confudding my poor head, but thanks even more so for the fantastic review. I really appreciate hearing from you and it means so much to me as a fan of your stories. ^_^


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