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Review:ohcrapidroppedmybrain says:
Hi! Since I've FINALLY cleared out most of the reviews I owed, I had to come here! I squealed when I heard another chapter was up, simply because your writing is simply delectable! I remember you posting a question up about this on the forums (a few months ago). Glad you finally have it up!

*turns on critic voice*

Now, I believe this chapter is about the innocence Teddy has, and the point of his life when he actively has to make a serious decision. This chapter is about him transitioning and growing up in a way...farther from Victoire. I noticed no changes in POV or tense, so that's a plus.

As you already know, you do all of your characters justice. I could imagine Andromeda; JK Rowling's Andromeda, actually doing the things she did in the chapter. And although she didn't really characterise Ted, if she was ever going to write about him, it would be done similar to how you do it. It's very beautiful to see in fan fiction, when most of the authors don't have this gift. I applaud you, Melissa. I applaud you.

I have something to say about Corey; was he supposed to sound like a spaz. I'm not sure if you were going for comedy, but as he was like, "My name is Cornelius Lynch. Call me Corey. Only my mum calls me Cornelius," I imagined him twitching a little. I didn't mean to offend him, or you. It just made me laugh.

I think you captured the essense of Hogwarts quite nicely; it was really familiar...I could practically taste the grandeur!

A few grammar errors:

There were places where the chapter was left indented.

"Yes, you share in his brBraden."

Besides that, good job and I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: CONSTANTS! (That was my excited voice)

I am so happy that you finally got to read this chapter. I know that it was a long time coming. lol. It was a difficult one for me to write.

So I'm blushing a little bit. Your compliments about my characters are far too kind. :) haha. Corey is just a bit of a tool. He's stuffy and pompous and thinks way too highly of himself. Feel free to picture him twitching. I dislike him immensely.

The essence of Hogwarts. wow. That in and of itself is a compliment. I tried very hard several times to write this chapter correctly. I finally settled for this. I'm glad it worked.

I'll be sure to edit this up. :) I submitted the next chapter today, so be sure to look for it today.

Thanks Constants!!!
Melissa


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