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Review:datbenik513 says:
Hey Melanie,

This was a touching, emotional piece. Losing someone is hard, it might slowly eat you away. Losing someone's twin, the person you had felt most connected to, can kill you. The pain you feel when he's not there any more becomes more unbearable by the minute.

I know you had to write "stream of consciousness" style. It fits perfectly with the purpose of this piece. George's remembrance of his Fred, this particular memory he's cherishing about them - oh, so painful, a fragment of a broken heart which probably never can be mended.

Moving, beautiful piece. A very nice first attempt in a style which is really tough to master. Two thumbs up!

Author's Response: Hi Zoltan! Thank you for the review!

I'm glad you thought the stream of consciousness style fit this piece. I feel like it really suits characters like Fred and George in general, particularly because of their sometimes inane behavior.

This style definitely is difficult to master -- it's at odds with the way I do everything, which is to think it our first. But I'm very glad the end result was able to convey so many emotions.

I appreciate your review!

Melanie


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