I've got to hand it to you, Melanie. When you told me this was a stream of consciousness fic, I thought it was going to be as dreadful and as boring and as pointless as a work by William Faulkner. Yes, I despise the man, if only because one sentence can take up three-fourths of a page. It's just not natural, I say!
Anyway, moving on to the actual review.
Once again, you have done it. Struck gold. And with such a simple prompt, too! I mean, it must have been difficult to think of a one-shot based upon the word "moonbeam", but you've done a fabulous job with it. The fact that they were always and will forever be chasing what it unobtainable brings tears to my eyes. Their quest is so...futile. And they take it with the naivety that they'll actually get what they're after. It's tragic, but at the same time oddly uplifting.
For some reason, the jumper bit made me tear up. Horribly, too. I got the sniffles and my roommate was all, 'What the hell, why are you almost crying?'. It was very hard to explain, so I just showed her. Surprise, surprise, she loved it as well and told me to tell you so.
I experienced several different emotions throughout the length of the piece. At first, I was joyous at their childish behaviour, their innocence. And then my spirits were dampened, weighed down by the tragedy and the jumpers. Those darn jumpers! But by the end, like I said above, I felt uplifted. Somewhat hopeful. It reminds me of the feeling I had when I exited the theater after watching "Finding Neverland".
Basically, what I'm trying to say is that everything you write, Melanie, is beautiful and unique. I don't think I've ever read the stories of such a diverse author. I'm just glad that I can count you among my friends on TGS. I feel honoured to have read this.
Fantastic job, my dear. But then again, isn't it always?
Author's Response: *squishes Molly*
I agree with you, stream of consciousness can be terrifying to read. I probably feel the same about James Joyce as you do about Faulkner. I'm really glad you liked this, though!
It was weird, the prompt immediately made me think of the twins -- probably because I immediately started thinking up all these random, philosophical, amusing questions they could ask about the moon. So from there I just started writing whatever came to me.
I'm kind of glad to hear the jumper part had such an impact on you -- although I don't want to make you cry! *offers Kleenex* But wow, I'm so flattered to hear your roommate liked it, too.
I'm really ecstatic that the childlike behavior was apparent to you -- it's what I wanted to get across in this piece (well, as much as I could without planning anyway...it's what I was thinking about while writing). I had this image of them being their frivolous selves, but there was also a lot of futility and sadness. For me, it was a very nostalgic thing to write.
Thank you thank you thank you! I love your reviews so much.