Report a Review

This service is designed to allow HPFF users to alert the staff about inappropriate reviews.

Review:rachm34 says:
Aww, What a really cute oneshot bout them. I agree with you, not many people have ventured out to write Hannah/Neville stories so you writing one makes people very drawn to yours seeing how unique it is.

I loved the softness of your opening, how you took a couple paragraphs to just slow done and describe the scene. It was perfect the way your described it. Your descriptions were very soft, light, and soothing there. They described the surroundings to me very well.

I think it's really sad for Neville to be loosing his mum. I love how you put it into perspective.

Hannah's characterization is really well written. In Rowling's work, honestly we don't see much with her so the author of a story about her is able to bend, change, and write the character however they please.

There was one mistake I caught. You used the word "Waste." as in, I think it was: "Hannah wrapped her arms around Neville's waste."

You used the wrong spelling of waste. There are two different types of waste or waist. There is the type of waste, as in trash, as you used. Or the Waist as in the body part. You need to change yours to the WAIST. Not the waste. And other than that it was golden. The grammar was good, the writing was clear, and you really forced the reader to think.

:)

Author's Response: Aww. Thank you for your kind words. :)

I love writing description, so writing about the setting and Neville\\\'s body language was the best and easiet part for me. I could write on about that sort of thing forever.

I am glad you found it sad. I usually end up writing extreme-angst or extreme-fluff. I wanted to capture Neville\\\'s feelings at losing a mother he really never knew. I\\\'m very glad that you feel I succeeded.

As far as Hannah goes, I cannot picture her anyother way besides a sweet, loyal, and dutifully caring woman. As far as I am concerned, that is the perfect woman for Neville.

Thank you for pointing that mistake out! Although I\\\'d just like you to know that it is quite possible that Hannah wrapped her arms around Neville\\\'s rubbish. I\\\'m glad you caught onto this. I definately didnot want the reader to picture Hannah with her arms around a waste can. ;)

All in all, thank you for your kind and honest review.
-witness

Your Name:
Reason for this Report:

Examples:
  • The review is offensive.
  • The review is spam or chit-chat (not actually a review).
  • The review was double posted.
  • The review has formatting problems.
Submit Report:  





All stories remain the property of their authors and must not be copied in any form without their consent. This is an unofficial, not for profit site, and is in no way connected with J.K. Rowling, Scholastic Books or Bloomsbury Publishing or Warner Bros. It is not endorsed by any of the aforementioned parties. Rights to characters and their images is neither claimed nor implied. The use of photographs and/or the likeness of any person contained herein does not imply endorsement of any kind. Any depictions were obtained through publically available sources and therefore fall under fair use. Although we may provide links to other websites, we are not responsible for any material at these sites. You acknowledge that you link to these other websites at your own risk. All original administrative content is copyright of the site owner and must not be copied in any form (electronic or otherwise) without the prior consent of the siteowner. ©2000-2012 Fanfictionworld.net

[terms of service] [report abuse] [privacy policy] [site credits]
 
 

navigation

home

search HPFF
read stories
write stories
login/register
get help
site links
forums
podcasts
Terms of Service
Site Rules
contact us

  
 
 

categories & genres

Genre:
- crossover
- drama
- fluff
- general
- horror/dark
- humor
- mystery
- romance
- action/adventure
- angst
- au
- young adult

Popular Pairings:
- harry/ginny
- ron/hermione
- james/lily
- draco/hermione
- more...

Format:
- one-shot
- short story
- novella
- novel
- short story collection
- songfic

  
 
 

quick links

my account
ToS
random story
site rules
help
merchandise


  
 
 

fanfictionworld.net