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Review:Aether says:
Wow, this is so good! It's an insightful look into the recovering witch and wizard community a year after the war.

You're writing is excellent (especially your vocabulary), and the only point I have on that front is that you used "had" a lot, and I was told that things sound smoother if you drop the "had" and just say things that happened in the past directly. Like, instead of "he had thrown the ball to her" I'd say, "he threw the ball to her." It just flows smoother, in my opinion, and sounds nicer. :) Excellent one shot!

Aether

Author's Response: Why thank you!!! I have always read a lot and have always had an adequate vocabulary. Sometimes I am unsure about using certain words and worry about the piece sounding too wordy. This was the first thing I had ever written. I should go back and edit it, but I\\\'d like to think that the quality and smoothness of my writing has improved since then.

I\\\'m extremely glad that you enjoyed this little one-shot. :) Thank you for your review and be sure to check out my other stories!!!


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