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Review:xxSorcereSSxx says:
This is a great story. A small bit of advice (that you really need not listen to if you don't want to):
It's not quite right that all of the students know each others' parents. A few are given, certainly, but I don't think that Harry, Ginny, Ron, and Hermione would go on long spiels to their children about Hogwarts and their friends and enemies. I think maybe they should know a bit less about each other, that's all.
I love your characters, though. They all seem to fit in perfectly with their families; Azalea with Neville and Luna is a good example because she's a lot like Luna, with some Neville-ish characteristics, like her hair.
You've also got pristine spelling and grammar, which makes it delightfully easy to read and paints a clear picture. Well done on that.
I look forward to a bit more character development with Scorpius, though. You have a good start, having him reject Slytherin and choosing Gryffindor instead, but I want to see some of the similarities and differences between him and his father.
And who is his mother? I'm excruciatingly curious! This is a lovely story. What really drew me in was the title; that was cute.
Anyway, be careful with the cheesiness, and great job so far! This is an amazing beginning that's got a ton of potential! Update soon!

Author's Response: xXSorcereSSXx~

Thanks so much! I love advice, when it's contructive, so double thanks!

Well, I thought that it'd be different for them maybe. Because when we read the books, JKR has Harry pretty much blind to the wizarding world, but their children are more in tune. Do you get where I'm coming from?

I've been waiting to use the name Azalea for a long time! It just fit, what with Neville's love of plants and Luna's oddities (God, I love her) it seemed to fit quite nicely.

OMG, thanks so much! My biggest complaint on this site in reviews usually is grammar or spelling issues, so I try to practice what I preach. ^.^ I'm glad you think I'm doing well.

Scorpius is going to be gradually shown. Since I've gotten a lot of good feedback, I switched this story to a Novel from a short story and went on ahead with my original plan. So now, there may be a few installments, so he's going to come, but it's still early.

That's one bit of information I won't divulge. You'll have to read on. But this story was written before I knew about his wife now, so it's not her. That's one of the spots where I went un-canon.

The title just popped into my head one day as I read SS over again, realizing that Ginny and Lily were so alike. Nothing special. ^.^

Thanks for the good constructive advice. Awesome review! Much love!

kissedbyavampire

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